Dude, I was LOL while reading your comic! It was so hilarious! I couldn't believe that you actually said "Khá" in an assignment! HAHAHA And come-on! the three most tense scenes of the story had just one second each one, that was unexpected and really funny too.
Anyway, no more laughs.
We have a problem. You misunderstood the instructions or I did it. I thought that we had to put ourselves as a NEW character in the story. what you did was to give Sandy your Colombian behavior. The other thing is that you had not to change the whole story.
Besides that, I found some errors: When you said "I lose my husband" I think you wanted to say "I LOST my husband". Also, you wrote "It doesn't matters". instead of "it doesn't matter"
Be more attentive, Alejandro, you need to pay attention and review everything you do. I know you know those errors.
You did a good job trying to summarize the whole story in the strips you made. It was pretty funny due to the touch of you in every strip you used a coloquial expression. Even so I think you shouldn't have omitted Tommy from the story.
Here are some corrections
In the part ehre you said "You'd have said it before" it is not clear if you meant WOULD, SHOULD or COULD.
Where you said "it almost killed me" you should have said "it almost kills me" because for talking about facts you should use SIMPLE PRESENT TENSE.
in the part where you said "Yes but, what we've done?" the structure is the structure of a question, so you should have said "Yes but, what HAVE WE done?"
It seems you put a great effort on this comic strip but you could have done it a little better just by taking a little more time to check that all what you are publishing is what was demanded as well as the grammar mistakes you made.
Valentina and Adward, thanks for the corrections. I liked that Alejandro did a good job summarizing and adding a couple of funny scenes to the story. Alejandro, your story is coherent, although you forgot to adda yourself as new character.
Hi, Alejandro.
ReplyDeleteDude, I was LOL while reading your comic! It was so hilarious!
I couldn't believe that you actually said "Khá" in an assignment! HAHAHA
And come-on! the three most tense scenes of the story had just one second each one, that was unexpected and really funny too.
Anyway, no more laughs.
We have a problem. You misunderstood the instructions or I did it.
I thought that we had to put ourselves as a NEW character in the story. what you did was to give Sandy your Colombian behavior.
The other thing is that you had not to change the whole story.
Besides that, I found some errors:
When you said "I lose my husband" I think you wanted to say "I LOST my husband".
Also, you wrote "It doesn't matters". instead of "it doesn't matter"
Be more attentive, Alejandro, you need to pay attention and review everything you do. I know you know those errors.
Valentina Quiroga Ballesteros
Hi Alejo
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job trying to summarize the whole story in the strips you made. It was pretty funny due to the touch of you in every strip you used a coloquial expression. Even so I think you shouldn't have omitted Tommy from the story.
Here are some corrections
In the part ehre you said "You'd have said it before" it is not clear if you meant WOULD, SHOULD or COULD.
Where you said "it almost killed me" you should have said "it almost kills me" because for talking about facts you should use SIMPLE PRESENT TENSE.
in the part where you said "Yes but, what we've done?" the structure is the structure of a question, so you should have said "Yes but, what HAVE WE done?"
It seems you put a great effort on this comic strip but you could have done it a little better just by taking a little more time to check that all what you are publishing is what was demanded as well as the grammar mistakes you made.
Keep working hard bro. ;)
Thank you guys, I'll be more thorough and careful :3
ReplyDeleteValentina and Adward, thanks for the corrections. I liked that Alejandro did a good job summarizing and adding a couple of funny scenes to the story. Alejandro, your story is coherent, although you forgot to adda yourself as new character.
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